Hi everyone, Odd Sock here! A nice lady called Susanna has a competition starting today, called "The March Madness Writing Contest". We are supposed to write a Fractured Fairytale in less than 400 words. Our entry is below, but we've read a few of the other entries this morning, and aren't really sure that ours is worthy of even standing beside them. Oh well, we are still learning! I hope the humans will be nice to us... Goldie Locks-up the Three Bears! Young Goldie spies her chance, And dives across the floor; She doesn't stop to glance At who's coming to the door. Her tail wags high and proud, She's heading to explore; Her woof says "Bye" quite loud, She finds the house a bore! Down to the docks she'll run, She loves it round the boats; The sights and smells are fun - A busy town that floats! Mmmm....sausages are near, She tastes them on her tongue; Hmmm...mixed with smells of beer... She'll find them before long... A forest of tall masts, Sway up above like trees; Sweet smells, in tasty blasts, Are carried on the breeze. Not thinking if she should, She hops from boat to boat; She sniffs out all things good, And leaps each watery moat! She lands aboard a ship With nobody around, The deck's a messy tip, Of crew there is no sound. So nosing down below, She finds the table laid; There's porridge out on show, Three steaming bowls, just made. She licks to try to test From each bowl she can see, The smallest one tastes best, She gobbles that for tea; She next eyes up three chairs, And thinks she'll take a rest, And as with the three bowls, She finds the smallest best. CRACK, CRASH! She feels it break! She lands upon the floor; Still sore from her mistake, She noses round some more... Three neat bunks are found, Each built into the wall, And so this naughty hound Tries sleeping in them all! As you'll now have guessed, The smallest is just right, So having found the best, She curls up for the night. The three bears, who'd popped out, Have now returned to eat; The small one starts to shout "My food!" and "My poor seat!" That naughty hound then woke To see an ANGRY face; She ran before it spoke, To flee that scary place! She now made one great sound - She HOWLED to call for help; Some Policemen soon came round, On hearing that loud yelp! A hoard of jewels were seen Stashed in the broken chair; On asked where they had been, The bears said, "Here and there..." Those bears, they went to jail, While Goldie, she went home; In shock, she hung her tail. She does no longer roam. Click here to edit
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PatHaap
20/3/2014 04:55:00 am
Goldie saves the day! I love it!
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Melinda
20/3/2014 05:15:21 am
Thanks, Pat! Glad to see Weebly is allowing some people to comment tonight. (It is refusing to allow poor Susanna to!)
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20/3/2014 05:05:19 am
Yay Goldie! I love Goldilocks as a dog, very creative!
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Melinda
20/3/2014 05:19:36 am
Hi Erika
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20/3/2014 08:22:17 am
This is wonderful, Melinda! I love this take on the tale. Well done! Odd Sock is adorable, too. :-)
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Melinda
20/3/2014 05:21:18 pm
Thanks Cheryl! Odd Sock is a bit of a social media butterfly since I let her have her own Twitter account. (She even flies a Spitfire plane with #theaviators, one of her Anipal groups!)
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Melinda
20/3/2014 05:23:44 pm
Thanks Juliana!
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20/3/2014 09:19:53 am
Hi Melinda...this is so much fun...good for Goldie, nosing out those robber bears.:) But maybe she shouldn't give up sleuthing...she may have a career in exposing fairy tale crime.:) :)
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Melinda
20/3/2014 05:26:37 pm
Thanks Vivian!
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20/3/2014 10:50:51 am
A fun take on this tail . .I mean, tale. I especially liked how you eluded to the third being the best without telling us how Goldie tried them all. Super!
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Melinda
20/3/2014 05:29:45 pm
Thanks Joanne. Yes, I soon discovered that 400 words weren't going to go far if I went through the traditional take on testing three of everything!
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20/3/2014 11:25:48 am
What do you mean, "not worthy of standing next to them"?! You've done a terrific job with this Melinda! The story is fun and a clever twist on the tale, and I love the surprise ending where the bears turn out to be jewel thieves - totally didn't see that coming! :) My favorite line? "Still sore from her mistake" :) So glad you decided to join the springtime writing fun! :)
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Melinda
20/3/2014 05:39:28 pm
Thanks so much, Susanna, and thanks for hosting this great bit of fun!
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Melinda
20/3/2014 05:42:50 pm
Thanks Alena. I did start off trying to be "grown-up" and to write the story in prose, but my rhyming addiction got the better of me.
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20/3/2014 11:52:43 pm
Well done Goldie and well done you on a cute twist to this well told tale.
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Melinda
21/3/2014 06:58:18 am
Thanks Joanna! I'm feeling honoured that our little first attempt has been read and commented on by so many supportive people!
Melinda
21/3/2014 06:53:52 am
Thanks Cecilia!
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Elliah Terry
23/3/2014 05:56:19 am
Goldie as a hound--great choice!
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24/3/2014 03:19:58 am
Love this take on Goldi the hound :) Fun to read out loud too :)
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